Chapter 1 Page 4
Late page aaaaaaaaaand I had to draw a car. Eep.
A NOTE ON BAD BUBBLING ETC...
He curses because of the Car screeching, The car didn't screech because he cursed. YAY! 8D
Aaaw, what a, um strange and sad conversation. Just that they seem so casual about it! D: Man, I cheer for you Quaxo, you gotta get out of this alive dude!<3
Good page. I like how you handle the pacing of the plot. Your writing skills are great.
You present a number of interesting things. For example Quaxo crying in the face of death (and at the hands of his friends) is realistic, and it says something about his character. One can feel for him, and I like how you had him silently crying as opposed to writing "sob, sob". It conveys his hopelessness, and it makes one root for him all the more.
How M and R talk about doing the job here shows how they are trying to disconnect themselves from Misto in order to do the job, but at the same time one can see that there is some reluctance (though it's not enough to make them risk their necks for him). They also seem to justify their actions (which is also realistic).
Your art is great, and your use of black-and-white is wonderful. You no doubt hear this a lot, but you're a great artist, and I like your cartoon skills. I also like the second panel with MJ. His face is well-drawn, and I particularly like his expression. The car is good, too.
One thing that was a little confusing for me was the speech bubbles. In the first panel MJ is talking, but it looks like Misto is. However, it's no big deal.
Anyway, I hope you'll update when you can.
Have you ever seen Aaron1912's videos on Youtube? He has a bunch of footage from the 1920s, and his things are enjoyable: flappers, nightclubs, music, dances, etc.. Obviously, they are rich in historical clothing and other details. It might be something up your alley.
I feel for him, I really do.This is so tragic, and for one of my favorite characters of the musical (I have three). Keep up the great work! You have done so well in making them more human!
Im still upset about Quaxo however.......
I think i am going to cry as well.........
I'm lovin' this!
I have just recently found out a about this comic and I just love it. The only thing that I would point out on this page is the bubble of of the first panel. It is Jerrie talking but it is pointing toward Quaxo. It should be and easy fix for you to have it pointing either off the page to where we imagine Jerrie is or pointing inside the bubble itself.
Of course, if you want to leave it the way it is and worry more about tasks at hand, that is fine with me too. I really do enjoy this comic and have faved some of your DA.com art as well. Although I have never seen or read what you based this comic on other than characters from CATS... it makes me want to though...
Oh, sorry about the rant... looking forward to the latest update!!
Oops! I just found out that someone else already mentioned the bubble thing... sorry.